Thursday, December 18, 2008
Ranga's Meat Shop: Second Animatic
Ranga's Meat Shop: Second Animatic from Rohini Metharam on Vimeo.
In this version of the animatic, I worked more with the timing. Although looking at it many more times, I realize the ending is still too fast and needs to be fixed. At this point I have tested both versions of my story with my audience and have received the following feedback:
The visual style of the black and white flashback reads better as it is bigger and the audience is able to tell the difference between the younger version of the dad in the earlier version. The smiley face was more appealing to the younger audience. The story definitely does strike a conversation as the parents were explaining the story with their kids and discussing the moral with them. When children were asked what they wanted to be when they grew up and parents were asked what they expected of them, I noticed the attitudes of normally controlling parents move towards the aspect of "They can do whatever they want if they are able to do it." This made me hopeful. :)
Ranga's Meat Shop: First Animatic
Ranga's Meat Shop: First Animatic from Rohini Metharam on Vimeo.
This version of the animatic had to be revised as there were several key moments that had be slowed down in order to get the message accross. Therefore timing had to be fixed. Another critique that I recieved for this version was that I needed to keep the same visual language for the thought sequence-- I will have to choose between the thought bubble and the black and white flash back styles.
Saturday, November 22, 2008
Thesis Statement
My thesis is a humorous 2D/3D animation that inspires South Asian families to tallk about each others expectations of the children's career choices. I will showcase my animation in a workshop format that can be used by educational institutions.
Saturday, November 15, 2008
version 3 of the new story
Storyboard
- We see a long shot of Ranga's Meat Shop in the Jungle
- we go into the meat shop where we see a wall filled with pictures of generations of TIGER butchers that have owned this shop and we see a picture of the current ownder
- A LARGE TIGER is cutting meat with a big chopping knife, his back is turned to A YOUNGER VERSION OF HIM, HIS SON
- we see THE SON looking back to see if his dad is looking and then he goes back to what he was doing
- we see the boy making a small sculpture out of clay
-
- THE FATHER TIGER TURNS TO HIS SON
--(THIS IS A NEW SHOT) THE SON quickly puts his sculpture away
- THE FATHER APPROACHES THE SON WITH A LEG OF ZEBRA and lays it on the table in front of the boy
- HE HANDS the knife over to the boy
- THE BOY FROWNS -- POUTS AND SIGHS
- A DREAM APPEARS ABOVE HIS HEAD (we see his dream in 2d/3d cell shaded above his head) he is showing his dad his sculpture, his dad gets mad and cuts his dream in half. The dream vanishes)
- the boy gulps
-THE BOY LOOKS AT THE ZEBRA MEAT IN FRONT OF HIM
- he moves his hand up in preparation to cut, the knife flies out of his hand and gets stuck on the wall behind him BARELY MISSING HIS FATHER
- FATHER PULLS KNIFE OUT OF WALL AND TAKES A DEMONSTRATIVE WHACK AT THE MEAT-
-FATHER HANDS KNIFE OVER.
-SON CUTS- (we don't see what he's doing)
- CLOSE-UP OF FATHER'S FACE
-CLOSE-UP OF ZEBRA MEAT WITH SMILEY FACE CUT INTO IT
-SON BACKS UP --AFRAID AND OPENS FRIDGE
CLOSE UP PAN OF FRIDGE SHELF WITH ROWS OF CLAY BUSTS
- INTERCUT CLOSE UP DAD'S FACE----
he looks even more angry and starts throwing all the little sculptures out
- boy still squeamish as dad keeps throwing the sculptures out
- he stops his dad and shows him the big sculpture he made of his dad behind the little sculptures
- close up of boy's face as he waits to see what his father's reaction, he has a big smile on his face
- cut to dad's face -- his anger turns to puzzlement
- we see a little cloud appears above the dads head, (we see a younger version of him,
pouty, we see the hands of his father handing him a knife. he looks at the picture on the table next to him of a tiger in the circus, then looks at the meat in front of him and sighs) his dreams dissappears
- the dad smiles and pats his son on the head
- he picks up the meat sculpture
- scene fades
- mid Shot of Ranga's meat shop -- in the window we see the dad's sculpture along with al the other little meat sculptures. There's a sign in the window that says "BEST MEAT SCULPTURES IN ALL THE LAND"
-- the end
- We see a long shot of Ranga's Meat Shop in the Jungle
- we go into the meat shop where we see a wall filled with pictures of generations of TIGER butchers that have owned this shop and we see a picture of the current ownder
- A LARGE TIGER is cutting meat with a big chopping knife, his back is turned to A YOUNGER VERSION OF HIM, HIS SON
- we see THE SON looking back to see if his dad is looking and then he goes back to what he was doing
- we see the boy making a small sculpture out of clay
-
- THE FATHER TIGER TURNS TO HIS SON
--(THIS IS A NEW SHOT) THE SON quickly puts his sculpture away
- THE FATHER APPROACHES THE SON WITH A LEG OF ZEBRA and lays it on the table in front of the boy
- HE HANDS the knife over to the boy
- THE BOY FROWNS -- POUTS AND SIGHS
- A DREAM APPEARS ABOVE HIS HEAD (we see his dream in 2d/3d cell shaded above his head) he is showing his dad his sculpture, his dad gets mad and cuts his dream in half. The dream vanishes)
- the boy gulps
-THE BOY LOOKS AT THE ZEBRA MEAT IN FRONT OF HIM
- he moves his hand up in preparation to cut, the knife flies out of his hand and gets stuck on the wall behind him BARELY MISSING HIS FATHER
- FATHER PULLS KNIFE OUT OF WALL AND TAKES A DEMONSTRATIVE WHACK AT THE MEAT-
-FATHER HANDS KNIFE OVER.
-SON CUTS- (we don't see what he's doing)
- CLOSE-UP OF FATHER'S FACE
-CLOSE-UP OF ZEBRA MEAT WITH SMILEY FACE CUT INTO IT
-SON BACKS UP --AFRAID AND OPENS FRIDGE
CLOSE UP PAN OF FRIDGE SHELF WITH ROWS OF CLAY BUSTS
- INTERCUT CLOSE UP DAD'S FACE----
he looks even more angry and starts throwing all the little sculptures out
- boy still squeamish as dad keeps throwing the sculptures out
- he stops his dad and shows him the big sculpture he made of his dad behind the little sculptures
- close up of boy's face as he waits to see what his father's reaction, he has a big smile on his face
- cut to dad's face -- his anger turns to puzzlement
- we see a little cloud appears above the dads head, (we see a younger version of him,
pouty, we see the hands of his father handing him a knife. he looks at the picture on the table next to him of a tiger in the circus, then looks at the meat in front of him and sighs) his dreams dissappears
- the dad smiles and pats his son on the head
- he picks up the meat sculpture
- scene fades
- mid Shot of Ranga's meat shop -- in the window we see the dad's sculpture along with al the other little meat sculptures. There's a sign in the window that says "BEST MEAT SCULPTURES IN ALL THE LAND"
-- the end
New Story with better ending
- We see a long shot of Ranga's Meat Shop in the Jungle
- we go into the meat shop where we see a wall filled with pictures of generations of TIGER butchers that have owned this shop and we see a picture of the current ownder
- A LARGE TIGER is cutting meat with a big chopping knife, his back is turned to A YOUNGER VERSION OF HIM, HIS SON
- we see THE SON looking back to see if his dad is looking and then he goes back to what he was doing
- we see the boy making a small sculpture out of clay
-
- THE FATHER TIGER TURNS TO HIS SON
--(THIS IS A NEW SHOT) THE SON quickly puts his sculpture away
- THE FATHER APPROACHES THE SON WITH A LEG OF ZEBRA and lays it on the table in front of the boy
- HE HANDS the knife over to the boy
- THE BOY FROWNS -- POUTS AND SIGHS
- A DREAM APPEARS ABOVE HIS HEAD (we see his dream in 2d/3d cell shaded above his head) he is showing his dad his sculpture, his dad gets mad and cuts his dream in half. The dream vanishes)
- the boy gulps
-THE BOY LOOKS AT THE ZEBRA MEAT IN FRONT OF HIM
- he moves his hand up in preparation to cut, the knife flies out of his hand and gets stuck on the wall behind him BARELY MISSING HIS FATHER
- FATHER PULLS KNIFE OUT OF WALL AND TAKES A DEMONSTRATIVE WHACK AT THE MEAT-
-FATHER HANDS KNIFE OVER.
-SON CUTS- (we don't see what he's doing)
- CLOSE-UP OF FATHER'S FACE
-CLOSE-UP OF CARCASS WITH A CUT IN SMILEY FACE
-SON BACKS UP --AFRAID AND OPENS FRIDGE
CLOSE UP PAN OF FRIDGE SHELF WITH ROWS OF CLAY BUSTS WITH DAD'S BUST AS LARGEST ONE.
- INTERCUT CLOSE UP DAD'S FACE----
he looks even more angry and starts throwing all the little sculptures out
- boy still squeamish, looks around and sees a price tag on the table
- he picks up the price tag and sticks it into the large meat sculpture of his dad
- close up of boy's face as he waits to see what his father's reaction
- cut to dad's face -- his anger turns to puzzlement and then a smile
- dad pats his son on his head and picks up the meat sculpture
- scene fades
- mid Shot of Ranga's meat shop -- in the window we see the dad's sculpture along with al the other little meat sculptures. There's a sign in the window that says "BEST MEAT SCULPTURES IN ALL THE LAND"
-- the end
- we go into the meat shop where we see a wall filled with pictures of generations of TIGER butchers that have owned this shop and we see a picture of the current ownder
- A LARGE TIGER is cutting meat with a big chopping knife, his back is turned to A YOUNGER VERSION OF HIM, HIS SON
- we see THE SON looking back to see if his dad is looking and then he goes back to what he was doing
- we see the boy making a small sculpture out of clay
-
- THE FATHER TIGER TURNS TO HIS SON
--(THIS IS A NEW SHOT) THE SON quickly puts his sculpture away
- THE FATHER APPROACHES THE SON WITH A LEG OF ZEBRA and lays it on the table in front of the boy
- HE HANDS the knife over to the boy
- THE BOY FROWNS -- POUTS AND SIGHS
- A DREAM APPEARS ABOVE HIS HEAD (we see his dream in 2d/3d cell shaded above his head) he is showing his dad his sculpture, his dad gets mad and cuts his dream in half. The dream vanishes)
- the boy gulps
-THE BOY LOOKS AT THE ZEBRA MEAT IN FRONT OF HIM
- he moves his hand up in preparation to cut, the knife flies out of his hand and gets stuck on the wall behind him BARELY MISSING HIS FATHER
- FATHER PULLS KNIFE OUT OF WALL AND TAKES A DEMONSTRATIVE WHACK AT THE MEAT-
-FATHER HANDS KNIFE OVER.
-SON CUTS- (we don't see what he's doing)
- CLOSE-UP OF FATHER'S FACE
-CLOSE-UP OF CARCASS WITH A CUT IN SMILEY FACE
-SON BACKS UP --AFRAID AND OPENS FRIDGE
CLOSE UP PAN OF FRIDGE SHELF WITH ROWS OF CLAY BUSTS WITH DAD'S BUST AS LARGEST ONE.
- INTERCUT CLOSE UP DAD'S FACE----
he looks even more angry and starts throwing all the little sculptures out
- boy still squeamish, looks around and sees a price tag on the table
- he picks up the price tag and sticks it into the large meat sculpture of his dad
- close up of boy's face as he waits to see what his father's reaction
- cut to dad's face -- his anger turns to puzzlement and then a smile
- dad pats his son on his head and picks up the meat sculpture
- scene fades
- mid Shot of Ranga's meat shop -- in the window we see the dad's sculpture along with al the other little meat sculptures. There's a sign in the window that says "BEST MEAT SCULPTURES IN ALL THE LAND"
-- the end
Friday, November 14, 2008
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