Saturday, November 15, 2008

New Story with better ending

- We see a long shot of Ranga's Meat Shop in the Jungle

- we go into the meat shop where we see a wall filled with pictures of generations of TIGER butchers that have owned this shop and we see a picture of the current ownder

- A LARGE TIGER is cutting meat with a big chopping knife, his back is turned to A YOUNGER VERSION OF HIM, HIS SON

- we see THE SON looking back to see if his dad is looking and then he goes back to what he was doing

- we see the boy making a small sculpture out of clay
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-    THE FATHER TIGER TURNS TO HIS SON

--(THIS IS A NEW SHOT) THE SON quickly puts his sculpture away

- THE FATHER APPROACHES THE SON WITH A LEG OF ZEBRA  and lays it on the table in front of the boy

- HE HANDS the knife over to the boy 

- THE BOY FROWNS -- POUTS AND SIGHS 

- A DREAM APPEARS ABOVE HIS HEAD (we see his dream in 2d/3d cell shaded above his head) he is showing his dad his sculpture, his dad gets mad and cuts his dream in half. The dream vanishes)

- the boy gulps
   -THE BOY LOOKS AT THE ZEBRA MEAT IN FRONT OF HIM

- he moves his hand  up in preparation to cut, the knife flies out of his hand and gets stuck on the wall behind him BARELY MISSING HIS FATHER

- FATHER PULLS KNIFE OUT OF WALL AND TAKES A DEMONSTRATIVE WHACK AT THE MEAT-
   -FATHER HANDS KNIFE OVER.
-SON CUTS- (we don't see what he's doing)

- CLOSE-UP OF FATHER'S FACE
 -CLOSE-UP OF CARCASS WITH A CUT IN SMILEY FACE

-SON BACKS UP --AFRAID AND OPENS FRIDGE
    CLOSE UP PAN OF FRIDGE SHELF WITH ROWS OF CLAY BUSTS WITH DAD'S BUST AS LARGEST ONE.

- INTERCUT CLOSE UP DAD'S FACE----
he looks even more angry and starts throwing all the little sculptures out

- boy still squeamish, looks around and sees a price tag on the table

- he picks up the price tag and sticks it into the large meat sculpture of his dad

- close up of boy's face as he waits to see what his father's reaction

- cut to dad's face -- his anger turns to puzzlement and then a smile

- dad pats his son on his head and picks up the meat sculpture

- scene fades

- mid Shot of Ranga's meat shop -- in the window we see the dad's sculpture along with al the other little meat sculptures. There's a sign in the window that says "BEST MEAT SCULPTURES IN ALL THE LAND"

-- the end

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